# 英语初级 · 第 8 周 Day 6｜四项自查改日记

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**今天学什么**

初稿一定有问题，复盘日的任务不是重写，而是拿一张四项表逐条查：动词过去式、时间标记、连接词、字数。自己改比等人批改有用，因为你能看见自己的错集中在哪一类。今天改完交二稿，过去式正确率要到八成以上，字数落在七十六到八十四。改稿时顺手补错词本，本周要往一百六十条上靠。

## 一、今日任务

| 环节 | 时长 | 具体动作 | 产出 |
| --- | --- | --- | --- |
| 1 读初稿 | 5 min | 出声读一遍，读不顺的地方画波浪线 | 标注稿 |
| 2 查动词 | 12 min | 圈出每个动词，逐个核对过去式，不规则动词单独列 | 动词清单 |
| 3 查标记 | 10 min | 数时间标记，少于三个补，多于五个删，核对时态一致 | 标记清单 |
| 4 查连接 | 8 min | 句与句之间补 then、after that、but、because | 连接词标注 |
| 5 数字数 | 10 min | 逐词数，超了删形容词，少了加动作，读二稿录音 | 二稿 + 录音 |

合计 45 分钟。第 2 步是重头，十二分钟只做一件事：把所有动词圈出来。圈完你会发现，错往往集中在两三个词上，比如 go 写成 goed，have 写成 haved，改掉这两三个，正确率立刻上去。

第 5 步的录音不是可选项。二稿改完必须读一遍，读的时候会暴露改稿没发现的别扭句子，比如两个逗号连成一句、主语重复三次。听到了就再改一处，不必追求完美。

四项表建议真画在纸上，四行两列：左边写项目，右边写“几处错、怎么改”。写完这张表，你就知道自己这周最弱的是哪一项，下周的十分钟热身可以直接对着它练，不用再从第一课翻起。

## 二、核心词汇

| 单词 | 音标 | 词性 | 中文释义 | 高频搭配 | 例句与翻译 |
| --- | --- | --- | --- | --- | --- |
| hold on | /həʊld ɒn/ | 短语 | 稍等 | hold on a moment | Hold on, please. 请稍等。 |
| available | /əˈveɪləbl/（≈厄韦勒布尔） | 形容词 | 有空的 | be available now | He isn't available now. 他现在不方便接电话。 |
| promise | /ˈprɒmɪs/（≈普罗米斯） | 动词 | 承诺 | promise to do | I promise I'll call you. 我保证会给你打电话。 |
| cancel | /ˈkænsl/（≈坎斯尔） | 动词 | 取消 | cancel a booking | I'd like to cancel my booking. 我想取消预订。 |
| appointment | /əˈpɔɪntmənt/（≈厄波伊恩特默恩特） | 名词 | 预约 | make an appointment | I made an appointment for Friday. 我约了周五。 |
| finally | /ˈfaɪnəli/（≈法讷利·轻） | 副词 | 最后 | finally, I... | Finally, I went to bed. 最后我上床睡觉。 |
| ago | /əˈɡəʊ/（≈厄欧·轻） | 副词 | 以前 | two days ago | I called her two days ago. 我两天前给她打过电话。 |
| tired | /ˈtaɪəd/（≈泰厄德·轻） | 形容词 | 累的 | feel tired | I felt tired after work. 下班后我觉得累。 |

八个都是本周出现过的词，今天不学新词，只做一件事：看着中文说英文，说不出就翻回对应那天的文档，把例句再读三遍。

复习词的标准不是“认识”，是“能主动用”。认识 cancel 但说不出 I'd like to cancel my booking，等于没掌握；能说出整句，哪怕拼写差一个字母，也算过关。今天按这个标准过一遍，不过关的抄进错词本。

## 三、发音/语法点

**改稿的四个顺序**

1. 第一遍只查动词：每个动词圈出来，逐个数是不是过去式，不规则动词单独列一张小表。
2. 第二遍查时间标记：少于三个就补，多于五个就删；标记与动词必须一致，不能 yesterday 配 go。
3. 第三遍查连接词：句与句之间有没有 then、after that、but、because；连续三个短句没有连接，读起来像清单。
4. 第四遍数词数：七十六到八十四都算合格，不用凑整；超了删形容词，少了加一个动作。
5. 改的时候换一种颜色，原句留着不擦，改完能一眼看出自己错在哪一类。

| 错误 | 正确 | 原因 |
| --- | --- | --- |
| I goed to the shop. | I went to the shop. | go 是不规则动词，不能加 -ed |
| Yesterday I go to work. | Yesterday I went to work. | 标记与过去式必须一致 |
| I woke up. I had breakfast. I went out. | I woke up, then I had breakfast, and after that I went out. | 三个短句之间要有连接 |
| 九十二词 | 删两个形容词和一个地点，压到八十四以内 | 字数超标同样不合格 |

常见错误：一是只改拼写不改时态，把 recieve 改成 receive，却留着 I go；二是把连接词当装饰，一句话里塞三个 then，读起来更乱；三是越改越长，因为加形容词比删句子容易，改到最后九十五词还不自知。

改稿的心态也要摆正：目标不是零错误，是把错误压到不影响理解。八成的过去式正确率意味着一百个动词里允许错二十个，先保住骨架，再抠细节。

## 四、句型/对话

改稿常用的替换与连接（照着换，不要新造结构）：

1. Then I went home. 然后我回家了。
2. After that, I cooked dinner. 之后我做了晚饭。
3. Later, I called my sister. 后来我给姐姐打了电话。
4. Finally, I went to bed at eleven. 最后我十一点上床。
5. I was tired, but I was happy. 我累但开心。
6. I went to bed early because I was tired. 我早睡是因为累了。
7. I didn't watch TV. I read a book. → I didn't watch TV. Instead, I read a book. 我没看电视，而是看书。
8. It was a long day, and I felt good. 这一天很长，但感觉不错。

一段改稿示范（左边初稿，右边二稿）：

初稿：Yesterday I go to park. I very tired. I go home and sleep.
二稿：Yesterday I went to the park with my friend. I was very tired, so I went home and went to bed early.
改了三处：go 变 went，补 be 动词 was，sleep 换成 went to bed；另外加了一个连接词 so，句子从三段变成一段。

## 五、练习

**A 找错并改（8 题，每句一处错）**

1. I goed home at six.
2. Yesterday I have lunch with Tom.
3. I didn't went to work.
4. I was very tired, I went to bed early.
5. I very like the book.
6. He don't came yesterday.
7. I bought a book and I read it and I liked it.
8. Last week I am at home.

**B 改稿四项（5 题）**

1. 补时间标记：I got up. I had breakfast. I went out.
2. 加连接词：I finished work. I walked home. I cooked dinner.
3. 删到八十四词以内。下面这段九十六词，删掉重复形容词和多余地点后压到八十四词：

   Yesterday was a very busy and very long day. I woke up at seven in the morning and I had a nice breakfast with my family. In the morning, I cleaned my small room and I went to the big supermarket. After lunch, I met a good friend at a small café near the station. We talked for a long time. Then I went back to my office. I finished work at six and walked home. In the evening, I cooked a simple dinner and watched TV at home. Finally, I went to bed at eleven.
4. 判断字数是否合格：七十二词、八十词、九十词。
5. 改时态：把下面五句改成过去时：I get up at seven. I have breakfast at home. I go to work by bus. I finish work at six. I watch TV in the evening.

**C 听说与写作（2 题）**

1. 按四项表改自己的初稿，交二稿，七十六到八十四词。
2. 朗读二稿并录 60—75 秒，回听标出仍不顺的一处。

## 六、参考答案

**A**

1. I went home at six. —— go 的过去式是 went。
2. Yesterday I had lunch with Tom. —— have 的过去式是 had。
3. I didn't go to work. —— didn't 后接原形。
4. I was very tired, so I went to bed early. —— 两个完整句要连接词，不能只用逗号。
5. I liked the book very much. —— very 不能直接修饰动词。
6. He didn't come yesterday. —— 否定用 didn't + 原形，came 要还原。
7. I bought a book, read it, and liked it. —— 同一主语并列，后面的 I 可省。
8. Last week I was at home. —— last week 配过去式。

**B**

1. First, I got up. Then I had breakfast. After that, I went out. —— 三个标记把顺序钉住。
2. I finished work, then I walked home, and after that I cooked dinner. —— 两个连接词轮换，避免重复。
3. 删十二处：两个 very、一个 nice、第二个 In the morning、small 两次、big、good、at home，共减十二词，正好八十四词。删完必须重新数一遍，不能凭感觉。
4. 七十二词不合格，八十词合格，九十词不合格。 —— 区间是七十六到八十四。
5. I got up at seven. I had breakfast at home. I went to work by bus. I finished work at six. I watched TV in the evening. —— get、have、go、finish、watch 五个动词逐一变过去式，其余不动。

**C**

1. 检查点：字数在区间内；过去式错误不超过两处；四个标记以上；至少两个连接词。参考二稿：Yesterday was a busy day. I woke up at seven and had breakfast. Then I went to work at nine. After that, I had lunch with a friend. I finished work at six and walked home. In the evening, I cooked dinner and watched TV. Finally, I went to bed at eleven. I was tired but happy.
2. 回听检查点：语速稳定；没有中文；读错处不超过两处；标出的那一处写进错词本。

## 七、今日输出与自查

- [ ] 产出文件：日记二稿_第08周Day06.md（76—84 词）+ 二稿朗读_第08周Day06.m4a，60—75 秒。
- [ ] 四个动词项检查完：过去式、时间标记、连接词、字数，每项打勾。
- [ ] 过去式正确率至少 80%，即每十个动词最多错两个。
- [ ] 二稿与原稿用两种颜色，能看出改了哪几处；四项表四行都填了数字。
- [ ] 错词本本周新增 10 条，累计向 160 条靠近，缺多少条写在封面上。

## 八、明日预告

明天是本周轻输出日，也是第 2 个月的最后一天：日记定稿，再从四类场景里挑两类录一段 2 分钟对话，两个文件存档。今天改好的二稿就是明天的底稿，只允许改拗口处，不再改结构。

存档有讲究：文件名统一、放在同一个文件夹、日期写清楚，下周做月末自测时要能一分钟内找到。明天会给出命名规则，今天先把文件夹建好。